Tuesday, 6 October 2015

Jesse's 100 WC - "The legs!"

Sammy just got a new toy from and he saw a weird pot of legs rise from the ground at the middle of the town, my visual was off. One of the legs kicked me in the leg and l fell over, I landed on the ground. When l looked at it, it just perished away; strange. I require a trip home now! We went in the car and a spurt of water got me from the waterfall. Now l know not to ever beg or ask for a toy again to my mum and dad. 

1 comment:

  1. Hi Jesse, you used some technical in the story that made it interesting.
    You also used great punctuation.
    The story had a great morel, and next time make sure that you re read every thing so that it makes sense. eg: Sammy just got a new toy from( )and he saw a weird pot...



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