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Friday, 9 October 2015

Chloe's 100WC - "Crazy Bowl"

There once was a family who bought a bowl. But what they did not know, was there were people living in there. Oh and by the way the family who bought the bowl were actually giants and the bowl is actually is like a pool for us normal sized people. Well while the family was getting ready to have dinner, the people who lived inside the bowl were trying to escape. I do not think that the family know that there are people are in the bowl! So the people put their legs in the air to get the family's attention.

6 comments:

  1. Random, and a really interesting story to read!
    Maybe you could have added brackets to the bit where you talked about the sizing of the bowl and giants, to make it more professional?
    Did they get out of the Bowl?

    -Nikita :)

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  2. Random, and a really interesting story to read!
    Maybe you could have added brackets to the bit where you talked about the sizing of the bowl and giants, to make it more professional?
    Did they get out of the Bowl?

    -Nikita :)

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  3. Hey Chloe, I really liked the way you said by the way. If you could do it how many words you like how many would you write more or less?

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  4. Hey Chloe, I really liked the way you said by the way. If you could do it how many words you like how many would you write more or less?

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  5. Very interesting, what a different take on the story. How did you come up with this story?
    Next time maybe use some longer sentences.

    Asher :-)

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  6. Very interesting, what a different take on the story. How did you come up with this story?
    Next time maybe use some longer sentences.

    Asher :-)

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